My brother's in the army.He was just promoted to the rank of major.
我的兄弟在军队工作.他就被提拔为少校。
I'm afraid I can't agree with you. That's a good way of giving information, but it's not a good way of persuading people. For one thing, it's boring, and people aren't going to read an ad that looks boring. For another thing, one computer looks very like